In Plato’s passage, The Allegory of the Cave, Socrates discusses
to a fellow prisoner, Glaucon, on how the human race has evolved through consciousness.
A group of prisoners are bound and chained since childhood, and forced to face a
wall. The fire behind them reflects images of all different objects. What will
happen when these prisoners are freed, they will stand up, and go towards the
light. They will feel physical pain until their eyes adjust, but once their eyes
adjust the images that they see, are not what they are use too. Once the
prisoner is acclimated to his new world, he feels the need to help and free his
fellow prisoners. To show them the light as well, the prisoner goes back and
learns that without a wanting or a need to be aware there is no helping them.
The prisoner now knows of the outside world, and he refuses to go back to that
same lifestyle. Prisoners have their conditioned lives and they will kill anyone
that tries to take them out of the darkness. Socrates says to Glaucon on the
story that he just told; the prison symbolizes our world now that we live in,
and what we see, the light and fire symbolizes the way out of the darkness. This
expression through symbolism is Socrates opinion on awareness and consciousness
and he feels right or wrong that’s the way he sees things.
1. well i say that there was a main idea but you don't have a introduction. you just went to what the story was saying.like you went straight into the body paragraph.
ReplyDelete2. you do have great supporting details but only if you had an introduction. its like you needed the intro to have those details flow in place.
3.wait OK so idk if I'm right here but you don't have a main idea.. its like what i said in number 1. you just went straight the details. its like when you read my blog, i had sort an attention getter. it like you knew what i was going to talk about from the start.
4. yes you did write it in you own words.
5. yes there is some minor grammar errors such as run on sentence and style error. you have anything separating your paragraphs. i did see a good part of your summary. i was able to indicate where your conclusion was. which i truly liked a lot. "Socrates says to Glaucon on the story that he just told; the prison symbolizes our world now that we live in, and what we see, the light and fire symbolizes the way out of the darkness. This expression through symbolism is Socrates opinion on awareness and consciousness and he feels right or wrong that’s the way he sees things." but it was a run on sentence.
5. you didn't included your opinion. you clearly understood what the passage was about.
My honest opinion i truly liked what you wrote as you summary. it just need some minor fixing.
Main idea was not compeleted.
ReplyDeleteToo many unimportant ideas
You have some grammer mistake but not many.
You do have some organization,
No personal opionion included